The actual text is this:
- WERE you but lying cold and dead,
- And lights were paling out of the West,
- You would come hither, and bend your head,
- And I would lay my head on your breast;
- And you would murmur tender words,
- Forgiving me, because you were dead:
- Nor would you rise and hasten away,
- Though you have the will of wild birds,
- But know your hair was bound and wound
- About the stars and moon and sun:
- O would, beloved, that you lay
- Under the dock-leaves in the ground,
- While lights were paling one by one.
- I particularly loved the image of her hair being "bound and wound / About the stars and moon and sun." In my depiction, the sun is "off-screen," as it were, its light reflecting in the red glow emanating from the left side of the painting. I dressed her in a Victorian burial gown, and I swapped out her hands for "dock-leaves," which is an awful notion, by the way. In the speaker's imagining, he doesn't see her in a tomb, with a headstone; he simply sees her in the ground, covered by "dock-leaves," which suggests to me that he has (mentally, at least) buried her himself.
- I also wanted to make her face blushed and filled with blood and life, to emphasize, of course, that she should not be dead - that this impulse is not love.
Another stunning piece! And again, such great hair and lighting! I am especially in love with the banner of hair that waves off the left hand side of the canvas! And that moon! It is pocked and cratered like the real thing, and really a brilliant way to metaphorically discuss the "love" of Yeats's poem. The moon here is not some romanticized symbol of love that softly lights lovers in the night. It is beaten and dark and scarred--human, in its own inhuman way.
ReplyDeleteThe lighting on the tombstones is brilliant.
Ooh, and I love your reading of the dock leaves. Yes! He has dug the hole himself, hasn't he? So chilling!
She is beautiful too! And combining the ruddiness of her cheeks with the lifelessness of her eyes!